Um could sumone tell me if if this poem is nice?

[MetalGuitarist0]

is this good?
I sit alone just thinking about you
Nothing else to do
But smiling seems good

You know I really should
Just loosen up a bit
I’ll tell you how I truly feel
And show you how much I love you

I’d tell you how much my heart burns in desire
Like a phoenix rising in eternal fire
My love will never die
From the ashes it’ll always rise

You bring me into the light
I’ll never fear the fright I felt before
Before I truly met you
Before I knew
I love you

And it’ll never end
If you wish for it then
I’ll stand by your side forever
With your love I swear

You’ll be immortal through love
Memories I’ll never forgot
You’ll be in my heart after-death

My love shall never end
You hold the light of my heart
In the dark I’d find my way
Cos’ I’d be by you always

[xxbattousaixx]

yah its nice, good job

[MetalGuitarist0]

Thank ya ^^

[platinumtitan]

is this good?
I’d tell you how much my heart burns in desire
Like a phoenix rising in eternal fire
My love will never die
From the ashes it’ll always rise

i really liked that part. overall very good.

[arrogancy]

I like it....and I dont like to many things....lol

[FallenWings]

I’d tell you how much my heart burns in desire
Like a phoenix rising in eternal fire
My love will never die
From the ashes it’ll always rise[/I]


Yea, its really nice. I hope that you were writing to or about someone so they could appreaciate it as much as i did.

the part i qouted i thought was kinda funny in a way, considering the poem is about love and this part makes it seem like you wanna tear your pants off and strap on the saddle :lick: lol. really good though.

[AznGuyMateo]

I like it its very good