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Burningepitaph
05-15-2004, 11:15 PM
The Accident
By Craig DeWaele
Feb. 17 2004

Me and two other friend had been traveling the country. Leon was my name, Stacie and Mitch was my friends names. We had been traveling from Jacksonville, North Carolina. We had been traveling for three days already and we passing threw Texas. It was a cool, calm summer night. It seemed to be the greatest time of our lives. We had not known the reaper was sitting with us in the car. The loud sound of a train echoed threw the air. The train seemed to be about twenty minutes away. When I was about to go over the track I ran out of gas. The nose of the car was right on top of the tracks. We tried to get out but our belts were stuck. We struggled we heard the train and it seemed to be about 5 minutes. We had not knife or nothing else like it. We struggled the horn grew louder. We all struggled and cried and screamed more when we notice how close it was. When the train was close we all said our good byes. When the train hit the car . The car stood on it back and flipped on it top and rolled once more and stood still on it top. Mitch’s body was hanging out of the windshield and glass covered his body. I guess he got is buckle undone at the last second but it did not matter. Stacie’s body was still in the car but her right arm was out the rear right door. I had my belt still on and my neck had snapped. All of had been covered in blood. The look of horror was still on our face but it had come and gone.


tell me what u think please i am going to send this in to a local book they are making about any story that people want to tell and i need to know what some people think

BeatExeter710
05-16-2004, 12:55 AM
Uh.. I dunno. Is it supposed to be in English? Because, sorry to say, but you're English grammar is kinda rubbish. If you are seriously thinking of publishing this, try to ask for help on grammar and story structure. For example, rising action, climax, falling, and end. It's an odd story too... Good Luck!