i made a poem

[melchior]

it aint very good and i posted it in finalrushes thread

there are so many things that i desire
that i dont require

like that stuff bout my life
my life that has some sort a meaning

whatever that meaning is i dont know
cuz there is some one in my way

way of my life
my path

but still there is always that thing out there
that will show up and appear

at the moment when you least expect it
but without it

ya just wont live

it isnt that good but we all start somewhere..

[Final Rush]

yea, it sounds ok, but i think its choppy. there's not a whole lot of rhythm or flow to it. but otherwise, i guess its nice.

[Halena]

aww cool, everything is good today :-)

[melchior]

aww cool, everything is good today :-)

thank you very much

[PARANOiAwrx]

boobies?.......

[Hopeless]

boobies?....... uhh no, now quit spamming

As for the poem, it was alright, a little choppy at some points like final rush said, but good

[AznGuyMateo]

it was ok

it ryhmed.... once

that was cool

hehe

like i said, ok

[MaisalG]

It was alright..I like almost all poems. It was pretty good. :)

[Toboe]

Yea, I thought it was really good.

[melchior]

Yea, I thought it was really good.

at least some one liked it a lot

[ambypamby39]

^_^ i think it was pretty good. just think of it this way, you can write poetry better than me :riiight:

[TheNewMadPad]

^_^ i think it was pretty good. just think of it this way, you can write poetry better than me :riiight:
yeah, i cant write good but i think i can do better than this guy. no offense

[StreetDisciple]

4/10 im not ganna lie to you and say it was good it was a little less than avarage.

[ShadowKnight15]

its was...ok, better than me but then again thats like comparing your skills to a retarded shoe >_> ahhhhhh!

[Bx_GrL227]

its good a poem, i liked it

[ssx]

eh soso i mean it was good but i can see better out of u.

[BreezeofEchoes]

.. i guess one really can not judge a poem solely upon their opinion.. however.. i believe this little work needs.. well.. much revision.. keep at it