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Alucart
04-26-2004, 06:09 PM
mind this as a Rought draft as some areas are kinda bad i think.

Eyes on Me too
By ***** **** AKa Alucart
Song to Eyes on Me, by ( whos a guy who wants to )


Eyes on Me too

When I sing this song,
All alone, on my own
I see you, are not there,
I pray that you, are still near,
I wish, you could be with me,
I know, that it could never truly be,
I am sorry for the pain i have cause,
Can you, forgive me,

If I could turn back time,
I would have, have not gone,
Instead, I would have stayed,
With you my baby, my darling,
I wished for you to be here
I still long, for your serene touch
Angels have lost their wings here
When you, are not near.

Baby, i am, sorry, (chorus)
Wish you were here with me,
I just want you to know,
I still, love you so,
Whereever you may be,
Would you comeback to me, please,
I just can't love now,
Without you, without your Eyes on me.

What can i do for you,
I wanted to be there for you,
I will be still searching,
For your lips, your smile,
Please won't you return,
For My fire will not Burn,
Love me, with you please,
Baby return your voice to me.

(Chorus)
Oh Baby, can't you see,
Please won't you come back to me,
I just can't live now,
Without you, Without your Eyes on Me.


play the instrumental to Eyes on Me to find the rhythem theme.
you can find it here and also the original Lyrics:
http://master.cpe.ku.ac.th/~g4265322/html/eyes_on_me.html

Alucart
04-27-2004, 01:53 AM
Great Feedback guys...

Alucart
05-26-2004, 12:38 AM
zoundss... i need to bump this
for personal reasons

xxbattousaixx
06-01-2004, 08:10 PM
its alrite, i guess, but u should work on it more

yhyh02
06-01-2004, 10:44 PM
ummm....i have a question that has to do wit going out wit a girl....wen u hook up wit a grl wat do u do wit ur tounge in her mouth? im 12 and are going to hook up wit my grl tomorrow and need to know thx!!